User:Irj456/Covert racism/Epickerill Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Hkspton, Avery Shunneson, Jasonbb1233, Irj456


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Irj456/Covert_racism?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Covert racism

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead


 * Your leads are really good and you do a good job explaining what each section is and it's relation to covert racism before diving into the subsections

Content


 * The content is overall very clear and concise. I would be careful to read over some parts again to check for clarity and length of sentences. Here are some examples of sentences I found to be confusing or difficult to read:
 * "Covert racism has been replaced by covert racism within policing."
 * "Recipients are stereotyped and otherized, their individuality lost to a racially-charged generalization." <- might be a bit too stylized for wiki

Sources and References


 * Make sure to cite anywhere that has a quote or paraphrased material. For example: "Those obvious victories, he suggests, did not lead the US into a racial color blind society, but rather shifted racist beliefs to the "hearts" of Americans." When did Jackson say this?
 * Make sure that any arguable claims are attributed to a certain person/source. For example: "The US moved out of an era of De Jure racism to De facto racism in the 1960s after the successes of the Civil Rights Movement ."; "white saviorism...also perpetuates a subtle dependency from the survivor to the savior"; etc. A lot of people might try to disagree with these statements so you should attribute it to someone.
 * In general, citations should go after the period in a sentence.
 * The sources you use are really good and all seem very credible, just make sure to attribute certain claims to them explicitly if they present a strong arguable statement.

Organization


 * Overall the organization makes a lot of sense. If I had one suggestion, it would be to move the dog whistle/racial codes section (if you're planning to add to it) as a subcategory of language instead of its own category. If you do this, microagressions can also be a subcategory

Overall

You guys have added a lot and its clear that you did very in depth research!!