User:Ironphd10/Skeletal muscle/Salinas413 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ironphd10


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ironphd10/Skeletal_muscle?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Skeletal muscle

Evaluate the drafted changes
Seems like you still need to add quite a bit - I'm excited to see the additions! I really love the way the first paragraph is laid out - it is clear and gives a good picture for a lay audience (which is most wikipedia readers). I'm assuming this information is going to go under the development section on the skeletal muscle page, so that is the context in which I'm going to give feedback.

Biggest comment overall is that there need to be references for almost everything mentioned. I only saw one reference listed, and 90% of what was written needs a reference since most of it is not common knowledge. Also, I think the last paragraph is not necessary for a wikipedia article (I wasn't sure if that was listed for the class to reference or would be included). I would love to see the information mentioned in the last paragraph - I think it would be really interesting to know what changed skeletal muscle over evolutionary time.

The second paragraph is good, but I'm afraid it's going to be too repetitive with what is already on the skeletal muscle page under "Fiber types." It already discusses a lot of differences between the two types of fibers. Again, I think your idea for documenting the different mechanisms that impacted skeletal muscle will be a really good addition, I would probably just focus on that once you have it written.

A few typos to fix:

"Single cell organisms move towards stimulus that influence survival or move away from harmful stimulus." - I think both of the "stimulus" should be changed to "stimuli" or "a stimulus"

"For a lot of species, the ability to move is essential for predators to catch prey and prey to flee predators contributing to a species’ evolutionary fitness." - This one is just a little clunky, maybe adding a comma somewhere or rewording a bit might help. I would suggest something like "For many species, the ability to move is essential for catching prey or fleeing from predators, which contributes to a species' evolutionary fitness."

"It impacts the ability for a species to adapt to an environment." - I think you should specify "it"