User:Isa2114/Commercial cleaning/Iluvskeleton Peer Review

General info
Isa2114
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Isa2114/Commercial cleaning
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Commercial cleaning

Evaluate the drafted changes
Due to the fact that the user did not copy and paste the original Wiki article, my review will be limited because I lack the knowledge of knowing where the author wanted to make these changes in the article and where the author wanted these changed to be positioned in the 3 subsections of the original article. That being said, the draft is severely lacking. The author only provides one real source, the second being a link to a dictionary. Multiple more ideas could be explored in this article besides the definition of janitor. What kind of places do they clean? Whats their wage per state? Whats the culture like regarding this across the world? How dangerous is it? Is it as popular today as it once was? The original article states it is "at the lower end of the pay scale?" Compared to what? In what country? You could elaborate on this. What I am essentially seeing is this author added about two more sentences that lack a higher understanding on the topic the author is proposing to make changes to. The content remains neutral. The first sentence, "As a janitor or custodian, the main job duty is to disinfect/ pick up in the fast-paced environments that come with working in commercial buildings." tells me nothing about commercial cleaning. It tells me about janitors. Perhaps you could discuss what "faced pace environment that comes with working in commercial buildings" entails. I would assume its not very stressful, but you said its fast paced, what does that mean in this case? Also, when I click on the link to the dictionary (first source) it is blocked for me because I am not subscribed, therefore I cannot verify the validity of this source. Overall, a comprehensive description perhaps about the statistics or anything relating to commercial cleaning could be added to improve the article.