User:Isabellavrj/Polygamy in North America/Sfgadsden Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Isabellavrj


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Polygamy in North America

Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

 * N/A

Evaluate the drafted changes
The article draft has likely been completed, and not yet updated in Isabella's sandbox. I looked through the article which she has been assigned, and noted where she could include more information.

Though there is substantial information in the lead, she could potentially add a more informed introductory sentence if desired. However, given that the introductory sentence is intended to be concise and straight to the point, she would have to ensure its formation was not too wordy. The lead does not include any information that is not present in the article, so she could either leave it as it is or include new information that she has found in her research that she could expand upon in a new subsection.

There is significant space to add information under the Alberta and Mexico subheadings in the Legality section. She could also see if there is an updated list of Current Polygamist groups, and add to the list if she is able to find new confirmed organizations.

Overall, there is room for opportunity, and the article updated will definitely make the piece more refined and informational.