User:Isagreen/Draft:Capitalocene/HRVEF Peer Review

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 * Isagreen

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Draft:Capitalocene


 * Draft:Capitalocene
 * Draft:Capitalocene

Evaluate the drafted changes
I understand that Isaiah's contribution is the feudalism section of the Capitalocene page, so I focused solely on that. Firstly, the section is written extremely clearly, and is laden with references. I especially like the initial contextualization of feudalism that clearly connects the feudal system to capitalism. I would recommend, though, that the section be broken up into different subheadings- the section is well organized, but long; it may be easier if the section were further divided. Suggestions of mine would be: "feudalism and the economy, "feudalism and nature", and potentially "Capitalocene, not Anthropocene." The first paragraph of the section finishes with a list of ailments that contributed to the rise of capitalism. Those features: plague, failing agriculture, and deforestation could also potentialy be subheadings of their own to further explain capitalism's time and place within history. I also recognize that it is early on within the process, but the feudalism section contains a multitude of important references that require linking to other Wikipedia pages. The bibliography of the Capitalocene draft page is impressive, and comprehensive. The information presented seems to be extensively researched, and reliable.