User:Isaiahjoe123/Pittsburgh Power/Squidneybean Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Isaiahjoe123


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Isaiahjoe123/Pittsburgh Power
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Pittsburgh Power
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Pittsburgh Power
 * Pittsburgh Power

Evaluate the drafted changes
'''The article draft was neutral, clear, concise, and easy to read. You made sure to not sway the reader in any particular way and you did it in a brief manner. This allowed for an easy read. However, there are a few things I would change. First off I would make sure that you identify where in the article you are editing (ex. lead). I'm not really sure where you are planning to put your paragraph. When you identify specifically which parts of the article you are editing, it allows me to effectively review your article. I also would like to point out that there are no references to the changes you made in the article. I would make sure to add references so that people know where you are getting your information from and so I can identify specifically what you changed. Lastly, I would edit more of the article’s content overall. This also constricts the number of things I can give feedback on.'''