User:Iscucchi/Sex-limited genes/Lsmoses Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username) Iscucchi


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Sex-limited genes
 * Sex-limited genes

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think the first paragraph could be reworded so that it flows better and expresses thoughts more clearly. I also think that it is unnecessary to include Charles Darwin in the lead when he is mentioned in more detain under "A brief history." This is just my opinion, but I would say that it makes more sense to maybe mention him briefly in the lead, but not in so much detail as that will be explained more in the next section of the article.

Overall, I think I agree with the banner at the top of the page that says it needs to be written as an encyclopedic style of writing rather than an essay. Other than that, I think that the Genetics and Epigenetics sections flow well. I guess all I could suggest doing is adding some more information, perhaps maybe spreading out the information so that it is easier to read and understand.