User:Ishubatt/Leigh Janiak/Aljill Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ishubatt


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ishubatt/Leigh_Janiak?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Leigh Janiak

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Content: I think that the content added is good! There is good information about her body of work and inclusions of more recent accomplishments that deserve to be acknowledged. In the career section, there is a part that was taken out because Janiak is no longer involved in the project and I think that leaving it in and explaining that she was removed from the project might be relevant but it is also good with the new edits.

'''I didn't think it was important because the project never actually amounted to anything and I assume that happens all the time. Also, it isn't clear if she was removed from the project or if she chose to leave.'''

Organization: The organization is great! The only thing that I would change would be moving the personal life section to the beginning of the article.

'''Good point. I made that change.'''

Tone and Balance: I really like how you elaborate on themes and interpretations of her work. I think it adds a lot of character to the article while remaining factual.

References: I think that most of the sources are strong and impartial as they are mostly from Wikipedia. However, there is one source from a blog post that I am not sure is viable for Wikipedia.

'''Yes, you're definitely right about that. I used that blog post because I hadn't seen the film, so I needed to get a better sense of the tone and style, but I will remove it.'''

Overall: I think this draft is good! It seems like it isn't finished because of the mention of her TV directorial style needing to be added but otherwise the edits made really help to round out her Wikipedia page.