User:Ishymomo/Mona May/Kokoplatt Peer Review

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 * Mona May

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I really enjoyed learning about Mona May! I never heard about her, but I've seen some of her work in movies such as in Clueless. Great choice of article!

I think you organized the article well, following a chronological order. I like the table at the end with the list of movies/tv programs she worked on. You also added a lot of citations for almost every sentence.

Suggestions:

"May has been designing costumes for over 30 years." Instead of saying for how long, you can say since when she started designing costumes, because the information won't be accurate in 10 years+.

"May has been hailed by some as  “The Queen of 90s Movie Fashion”, best known for her work on Amy Hackerling's teen-comedy Clueless (1995)." Maybe separate the sentence into two? Unless there's a clear connection between her work in Clueless and results in having that title.

"Additionally, she has worked on  Romy and Michele’s Highschool Reunion (1997), The Wedding Singer (1998), A Night at the Roxbury (1998), and Never Been Kissed (1999)." Maybe clarify why you are mentioning these movies in the lead section, are they special compared to 70 other movies/tv programs? Or that's the reason she is called "The Queen of 90s Movie Fashion" ?

I might suggest reviewing the wording of some sentences as it can sometimes sound a little bit biased, maybe not neutral enough. For example: "One of the occasions you can clearly see Mona May’s lasting cultural impact is on Halloween."

If possible, I think it could be nice to see some pictures of her well-known costume designs! One for Clueless and one for Romy and Michele's Highschool Reunion.