User:Iskang15/Granblue Fantasy Versus/Lmc99 Peer Review

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Iskang15 's draft on Granblue Fantasy Versus


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 * User:Iskang15/Granblue Fantasy Versus


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 * Granblue Fantasy Versus

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hey Isaiah! Your draft looks really, really good. You made some significant and important changes. I don't have a ton of feedback, but here are a couple few things I found! I went in and did a few super minor grammar/punctuation edits; I hope you don't mind!

Lead
- if wikipedia has a page that links to what 2.5D is, I'd add that in

"Gameplay" section
- I was a bit confused by some of the wording/grammar in the "characters" section. I pasted the sentence below and bolded some of the changes that maybe would help make it easier to read!

Granblue Fantasy Versus has 12 initial characters'''. One character is unlockable through main story, but is also available for''' purchase in Character Pass 1 for instant unlock. Following the game's launch, several additional characters were developed and added to the game via Character Passes. Purchasing the Characters Pass also provides various bonuses to the main Granblue Fantasy game. This is not a huge deal, but I thought I would point it out just in case!

Plot
I really like the addition of this! Gives a good overview of what to expect from the game without being too lengthy--nice job!

just 1 grammar thing to consider: players will be disembarking on a journey --> players disembark on a journey

Development and release
Again, I think this is a really good addition! Excellent work with all the sources. I don't really have any criticism here except to make double-check grammar and phrasing and all of that before it goes live!!

Reception
I'm not sure if you need sources for the Metacritic / IGN reviews ? maybe have them on hand just in case, since you cite the Game Informer one :)

Overall, really good work!! I'd probably give it a quick read-through to make sure all the phrasing/grammar is solid (I pointed out the funkiest ones, but there definitely might be more!) You've added a solid number of sources, and I like your addition of both the plot and development section. I think they add significantly to the article.

Response to Peer Review
Hey ! Thank you for the kind words and also for your feedback! I made sure to incorporate these changes to my article as they will definitely help out in improving it before publishing these changes to the mainspace. Iskang15 (talk) 07:27, 6 February 2021 (UTC)