User:Isobel.Isobel/Sharlene Santana/Maryks Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Isobel.Isobel


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Isobel.Isobel/Sharlene_Santana?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: The lead covers almost everything in the article in a neat and concise way, and introduces Santana very nicely. The one thing I suggest adding is a sentence about her outreach and activism. Considering how many sources are published on Santana, I think a longer lead would be completely appropriate.

Content and organization: The content is sectioned in a way that organizes the extensive body of writing on Santa very well. The article also does a good job of using a diverse array of sources to accurately represent what's currently published about her. A suggestion would be to have "Outreach and Activism" before "Recognitions, Awards, and Honors". Since the activism section is still describing her work in science, it makes sense for it to follow "Career and Research".

Sources/ Tone and balance: The writing paraphrases the sources well and is very neutral and well balanced. Primary sources are used often, but in balance with other verifiable secondary sources as well. The information from primary sources is also very neutral and factual, and the majority of the article still relies on independent sources. The article succeeds in using and representing as many published sources as it can about Santana as well.

Media/infoboxes and overall impression: The use of media is great, especially since so much of the article references the bat species that are included, making the images more relevant. Overall, this article is well written, organized, and makes great use of its sources. It definitely proves how notable Santana is! With that said, here are some minor suggestions;

- in Undergraduate Education: "When she began her university studies, she initially pursued...", is a little redundant. Could use either "when she began" or "she initially pursued".

- Consider addressing her as Dr. throughout the article. Like Dr. Swalla noted, I think it's especially important for an underrepresented leader.

- There are many links already, but I'd suggest adding a few more to topics like "biomechanics", "evolution and systematics", "molecular biology", and "morphology", especially in the lead. Since a bulk of the article discusses her research and findings that contribute to the field, links to quick definitions of keywords could make it easier for the reader to comprehend everything.