User:Isobel.w18/The Jesuit Relations/Sophia.guo30 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Isobel.w18


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Isobel.w18/The_Jesuit_Relations?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * The Jesuit Relations

Evaluate the drafted changes
The content added (bullet points and notes outlining what the author wants to add and improve) are detailed and aim to further balance the article's content ("add more information regarding specific examples of fabricated or exaggerated events, including..."). The original article is quite short and could still be added to and improved, so it would be a good one to modify. The links for existing citations work, and the added citation ("The Jeuit Relations," Colby), published in the American Historical Review, seems to be a thorough and appropriate source. Though the author is in the beginning stages of improving their article, a wider variety of more recent, peer-reviewed articles might benefit its sourcing. The content to be added already seems to be well-written and well-balanced, addressing the biases inherent in the subject, and is broken down into clear sections. The addition of an image or two might also benefit the article.

The proposed content so far is off to a great start - it seeks to address biases within The Jesuit Relations, and goes into further depth and detail about the Jesuits' perspectives on civilization, untamed nature, and Jogues' matyrdom. The added journal article source was great, and additional more recent sources might serve to further benefit the article, as would the addition of an image. Here are several additional journal articles that could be contributed towards this article:

https://www.jstor.org/stable/2765352 - The Ethnologic Value of the Jesuit Relations, Henry S. Spalding

https://www.jstor.org/stable/24296575 - THE JESUIT RELATIONS FROM NEW FRANCE, Lawrence C. Wroth

https://www.jstor.org/stable/658982 - Ethnology in the Jesuit Relations, Joseph D. Maguire