User:Isobelpowell/Gum Wall/Emkajo0216 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Isobelpowell


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Isobelpowell/Gum_Wall?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Gum Wall

Evaluate the drafted changes
The details you added to the lead of your page are very informative and a great addition. If you wanted to add more to your lead section I would suggest a transition sentence that describes the articles major sections just to guide the reader through your article. I appreciate the conciseness and informative lead you created and edited. Moving onto to content- your additions add to and update the details already present in the article. The content you added such as the social media statement or removal of coins detail help the reader to understand the story of the gum wall at a deeper level. I honestly am surprised the gum wall didn't have a more in-depth wiki article prior to your edits. The content you added continues to carry a neutral tone and educate others on this tourist attraction. I learned quite a few new things just from your additions. By having a historical and controversial section I believe you represent all ideas present around the gum wall. Regarding your sources, I was having trouble accessing 24 and finding the article although it appears to me that it was a news article. Just remember to be careful and thoughtful with your sources based on the modules we do before we write these assignments. All of the content and sections you edited and added make this article on the gum wall so much more complete than before. I think your work speaks to the fact that one detail can change the course of a wiki page. Leaving in the five images from the initial article was a smart decision in my opinion. Another component you could add would be more in depth captions to the images. Overall, I think you did a wonderful job workshopping this article. You have transformed it from a basic unstructured wiki page into a more informative one. I would just look into the few suggestions I mentioned above and see how you can make this piece even better!