User:Israel.tharpe/Primitive (phylogenetics)/Sydneyglouse Peer Review

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User:Israel.tharpe


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Evaluate the drafted change
Very informative writing, especially since we have learned everything that you talked about. Organization is good since there is only two paragraphs, but maybe you could split it into three? Biggest thing is fix grammatical errors, as well as, add more references. Your sources were not linked so I could not check if they were reliable.

Things to consider:

-First sentence: doesn't really make sense, not sure if you were trying to say "biologists and researchers"? also I think instead of using a comma after relatedness I think you should add "and"

-Make sure you go through and capitalize beginning of sentences

-Beginning of second paragraph: add a comma after "In phylogenetics"

-add more references throughout so others do not suspect any plagiarism

-add links to other wiki pages for words like: phylogenetics, evolutionary relatedness, etc.-- look at words that could have their own page that further discuss the meaning

-Maybe you could add a picture or a chart that gives examples of characters?

-Make sure to just go through and proof read to make sure everything flows right, and if not maybe split a sentence into two sentences?

Sydneyglouse (talk) 18:42, 17 March 2021 (UTC)