User:IssaEm/Pelvic inflammatory disease/JHannaUWEC Peer Review

General info
IssaEm
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:IssaEm/Pelvic inflammatory disease
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Pelvic inflammatory disease

Evaluate the drafted changes
-In the paragraph that starts “disparities between races could be due to lower …” the opening statement is a subjective theory that was either crafted by yourself or the source. Either way it may not be the best to include since it does sound more like a theory than fact, and if it’s leaning more towards a theory that should be addressed. Overall the text should be neutral.

-One thing I do enjoy is the incorporation of the hook used in the original article, it's really effective and I’m happy you played off of it.

-A small personal preference is that massive amount of bullet points used in your sandbox draft, I’ve seen wiki articles utilize the table feature to create more dynamic visuals. But obviously this cannot be done for all bullet points, it could just be a possible way to add some flavor to the article.

-I do love how well and how effectively you added so much more content to the prognosis section. With your hard work it truly looks better than ever. However, I do see some hyperlink/reference issues in that section. It should be a quick fix though :)