User:IssaEm/Pelvic inflammatory disease/WiseWillowPtarmigan Peer Review

General info
IssaEm
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:Editing User:IssaEm/Pelvic inflammatory disease - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Pelvic inflammatory disease - Wikipedia

Prevalence/Incidence

 * I think you should clarify what "discharges" means (in your first bullet point). Is this hospital discharges?
 * I really like the stats that you use on the "records show that..." bullet points, but I think they all need citations. Are they all from the same source/the citation on the last bullet point?
 * You say that there are indications PID rates are decreasing, do you have any statistics to prove that? Update - I kept reading and found your sources/stats so that's great! I do think that these the statement about rates decreasing should be directly before/after the statistics.
 * I noticed the current published article has more sources/information about the correlation between PID & gonorrhea and chlamydia, I think that is valuable to keep in your edits because it helps explain your statement about testing for gonorrhea and chlamydia to decrease PID prevalence.
 * "Two nationally representative probability surveys referenced are the National Health and Nutrition Examination Survey (NHANES) and the National Survey of Family Growth (NSFG) surveyed women aged 18 to 44 from 2013 to 2014." this phrasing is a little clunky. I would recommend having the surveys be mentioned/cited more subtly instead of explicitly saying they are references. Ex. The National Health and Nutrition Examination Survey (NHANES) and the National Survey of Family Growth (NSFG) surveyed women aged 18 to 44 from 2013 to 2014 and found that...

Population at risk

 * Really good clear, concise information in this section!
 * Do you have any sources for this portion?

Prevention

 * One of your bullet points is "reducing number of sexual partners" and the next one says "being in a mutually monogamous relationship rather than having multiple sexual partners" which is repetitive. I would combine them in to one.

Treatment

 * "There is a small chance PID may "disappear" or spontaneously resolve itself. " This is really interesting, and I would add a sentence or two to expand on this.
 * There are a few places with extra commas.

Really great job! I think this is a really important topic to educate others about, especially because early diagnosis is critical, I think this article could help lots of people.