User:Issaomari/Brave Space Alliance/Fabdi3 Peer Review


 * 1) The article has a good Introduction, the name of the organization is bolded which shows the importance of the paragraph, alongside with that they give us the location of the organization. We are given what the organization offers within the community. I like how they worded this “ The organization uses a framework of mutual aid, knowledge-sharing, and community-sourced resources to achieve their stated mission.”
 * 2) Some changes I would suggest to the author would be to change some of the wording, I feel like some things put into the article could have been worded differently, simplified almost especially when it came to vocabulary. These changes would be an improvement because it would make it easier for the reader to understand what the article is about and follow it. For example, In the history section it was written as, “ the work involves”, I changed it to “These changes include the construction and funding of a new center that aims to open in 2024”. Another change that I made is, “ These aid programs help..” instead of “These mutual aids help people”.
 * 3) Something really important would be trying to cut out unnecessary vocabulary and wording.
 * 4) I really liked how they bolded the name of the organization. I really like the headings and would see how I can structure my article the same way.