User:Italex128/Breaking the Pose/ArtHistorianStudent Peer Review

General info
Italex128
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Italex128/Breaking_the_Pose?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):

Evaluate the drafted changes
This is a great start to your article! Primarily, the leading sentence sets-up the article with a great introduction. I do think it would be interesting for it to be expanded on to include a specific sentence or two about Witkin's life and the name of your artwork, so that the reader is framed with what the article is going to be about. For example the beginning sentence regarding when Witkin was born the the painting title "Breaking the Pose" I think would go nicely in the lead section.

There is a lot of great information in your article body first paragraph. I do think there are a lot of general statements that could possibly be expanded on. For example the sentence, "Witkin draws from life, never using photographs as a reference." This is a great sentence, but I am also curious about the specifics such as an example of Wikin's life drawing hyperlinked or information about why this is. Additionally, throughout the article body there is information about the formal analysis of the painting which is really interesting, but I am not sure if it is information that belongs in the article body. I would be interested to see if there are any sources that could be cited explaining the meaning behind the work and that explain aspects of your formal analysis - and if when reviewing it might be helpful to add the references at the conclusion of each sentence as you go along. Overall, great job and I am excited to see where this goes.