User:Italex128/Breaking the Pose/Dismurrt Peer Review

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Italex128
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Breaking the Pose
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Breaking the Pose

Evaluate the drafted changes
Dear Italex128, to start, I really enjoy the depth at which you describe your article. It seems as though you tried to add a photo, and perhaps it was removed for some reason, but despite this fact, after reading your description I knew exactly which artwork you were referencing. I was very excited when I looked up the work and found that it was the one I had imagined in my head. Despite your skills in describing your painting, I really enjoy the way you organized your article. All of your information has a very clear and balances coverage. There are some places in which it feels as though some more citations could be added, but that is also perhaps because you cite at the end of every few sentences, rather than every sentence. Additionally, there are some small sentences that I believe could be shapes into paragraphs, rather than sitting on their own. This occurs specifically in the "Execution" and "References" section, but I similarly understand that this is a choice of your own. Overall you had a very strong article, and I really look forward to seeing its finished state.