User:IvanTheVegan/Agoge/Areleah Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

IvanTheVegan


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:IvanTheVegan/Agoge


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Agoge

Evaluate the drafted changes
1) Lead

Lead is unedited here, but comparing with the live article, I'd say the lead is fine, clear, and not in need of editing. If anything, it may have too MUCH information in "with the exception of the firstborn son in the ruling houses, Eurypontid and Agiad." This information seems like it's not massively relevant to the concept of Agoge at large, and would be better suited lower in the article.

2) Content

All content appears accurate, relevant, and meaningful for the article. Giving Plutarch's opinion of agoge in the reception section does a great job at clarifying how outsiders might have viewed agoge in antiquity. The bit about Red Rising seems to be more of a fun fact than a real useful piece of information concerning agoge, but plenty of Wikipedia pages discuss the use of their topic is various forms of media, so I don't see why this particular instance would need to be any different.

3) Tone and Balance

IvanTheVegan's additions are as neutral as can be, purely statements of fact. The article as a whole is equally neutral, I can't imagine there are a lot of heated debates about the nature or purpose of agoge at this point, and the lack of normative statements backs that up.

4) Sources and References

Sources already present in the article all seem to check out. The newly added Plutarch source seems somewhat fishy at first just because the citation is so short, but I understand certain universities have online archives of ancient, and the citations from these archives can usually seem pretty lacking. Just double check to see if there's some extra information you could include either about the Plutarch text itself or the University of Chicago publishing it.

5) Organization

Everything looks pretty great, nothing stands out as sounding unnatural or hard to read. In the sentence about Red Rising, you do spell agoge as "Ahoge", not sure if that's a typo or if they spell it slightly differently in the book. Just double check!

6) Images and Media

Only one unique image on the page, and not a new addition. Still, it looks fine, is captioned well and is well-suited for this topic.

7) Overall

This article was really fleshed out before you even got to it, so it's impressive that you found a handful of additional details to improve the article even further. You've done good work in my opinion, just a couple things to check on like your potential typo and maybe adding to the Plutarch citation. Good job!