User:Ivy Zhao 0704/Taoist temple/Winnie54 Peer Review

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Ivy@Ivy Zhao 0704
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Hi Ivy! This is my peer review for you.

Lead

The introduction is short and concise. I like that you kept the translation and the Chinese characters for reference and the description of the temple’s exterior was intriguing. The lead was not updated to reflect the new content you have added but you can work on it.

Suggestion: include a short description of your two sections in the lead to guide the readers on what to expect.

Content The content added is relevant to the topic. I like that you provided the environment requirement as it is an important factor and guideline for people seeking to visit the temple. The content added is up-to-date. There is a potential extension and addition of sections to improve reader’s understanding (see the suggestions at the end of my review).

Tone and Balance

The content added is neutral and no bias opinion was spotted. There was no persuasion and simply just facts about the temple that are pulled from Chinese sources so good job! Some viewpoints on the history of Taoism Temple and the incorporation of the Chinese culture are underrepresented the modern utilization of the temple and the traditions practiced or passed on through generations. Maybe provide a section stating a few examples on how cultivating virtues and monasticism were done in the temple.

Sources and References

New content was backed up with reliable sources and it accurately reflect what the cited sources said especially on the environmental requirement. The sources are thorough and span from 2014-2016. It is written by different authors. I believe the sources were a scientific article and a peer-reviewed one. All the links worked.

Suggestions: In your 2nd Baidu source, there’s a great section on the finance and support in building and maintain a Taoist Temple. It will be resourceful to include that in your article!

You can consider writing about the threat of eviction due to rationalization. I found one article on it [| Singapore facing threat of eviction for Taoist Temple] There’s also some articles on restoration and protection, and the challenges on maintaining the Taoist Temples in all parts of the world that you can read on google scholar.

Organization

It is well-written and the content was insightful. No spelling errors but can work on grammar and punctuation. A suggestion to break down the Origin of Taoist Temple into shorter paragraphs so that it doesn’t feel cramped. Breaking down sentences allow readers to pause, reflect and absorb information better. The content is well-organized as it is broken down into sections.

Images and Media

The gallery itself is a great visual presentation of the Taoist Temple. Perhaps you can further elaborate the images presented in your article like fun facts or popular history about the location.

Overall impressions

The content added improved my understanding on the origin and customs of Taoist Temple and it was valuable to read and get to know about it! You did a good job in translating the source in Mandarin to English and written great facts in an order that was easy to read. Good work!

Suggestions to improve your article:

One section you can include is the kinds of people that visit a Taoist Temple and the use and purpose. It will be insightful if you can include the temple’s interior so that the readers can grasp and visualize how a Taoist temple look and feel like.

Another potential section you can include is the Buddhist Temple by comparing and stating why are they different

If you want to extend your article, you can explain the holy statues of Dragon and Tiger. The Three Pure Ones, Chinese characters like Fu (blessing), Shou (longevity), Ji (auspicious) as a subsection since it is introduced in the lead section.