User:Izzy Eckert/Climate change in Wisconsin/Siroisj2499 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Izzy Eckert


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Izzy%20Eckert/Climate_change_in_Wisconsin?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Climate change in Wisconsin

Evaluate the drafted changes
It's great to see a lot of the quoted statements are now being expanded upon before and after they're introduced. It's hard to believe that someone got away with just putting in quotes without writing anything around them. Also, I think there is very good representation of different groups within this article now, such as agriculture based workers and lower socio-economic groups suffering from climate change.

Everything is well organized, clear and concise, and is interesting to read about. After looking at the original Lead section of the article, I'm hopeful that whatever it is replaced with will be more effective in grabbing the readers attention.

As for comments on what to improve upon. I don't see a link for the "Great Lakes", that could be worth putting in for people who aren't familiar with that they are. Also, there's a large quote in every single subset, maybe getting rid of one of those and paraphrasing it would be a more efficient way to go about including that information. Other than that though, I think this article looks significantly better than it did before.