User:J.camSP23/Political representation/Ducksarethebestbird Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

J.camSP23


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:J.camSP23/Political_representation?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Political representation

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)


 * What is the article's overall status?

Overall, I think your article is in great shape! Your lead provides a clear and concise overview of your page and the topic as a whole. I also think your breakdown of issues makes logical sense and I really like how you incorporated relevant imagery.


 * What are the article's strengths?

I think you’re making an important contribution to the political representation page; the current page provides an overview of different kinds of political representation (descriptive, substantive, etc.), but I think it’s important to have a section that talks about women’s political representation transparently. I also appreciate your topic breakdown, and see lots of room for building upon the outline you have created.


 * How can the article be improved?

I think you could include a more intersectional discussion of women’s political representation. “Women” is very broad category and I think there are a lot of important differences in the political representation of women based on location (which you did a nice job of describing), but it is also is very racialized and I think the experience of non-white women in politics would be another important contribution to the political representation page.


 * How would you assess the article's completeness - i.e. Is the article well-developed? Is it underdeveloped or poorly developed?

I think your article is solidly developed! I definitely think the sections could be more fleshed out with discussions of supply vs demand factors in representation, but I think as is your article provides a comprehensive overview of the status of women’s representation in politics.

link to full peer review: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1xSoLh2MWnrzWxVNNY-yCOqhE-xaZ4brl/edit?usp=sharing&ouid=112155677829801122402&rtpof=true&sd=true