User:J0cote12/Auriea Harvey/OrangeAdam Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

J0cote12


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:J0cote12/Auriea Harvey


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Auriea Harvey & Michaël Samyn

Evaluate the drafted changes
I'll lead off by saying it seems like there is already an article for this subject (Auriea Harvey & Michaël Samyn), I'm not sure if you were unaware or if you hoped to add additional information to the existing article. In any case most information is identical between your draft and the existing article.

The information you have is good and the descriptions of the games are effective. All of the details you would need are concisely presented in a sentence or two. Your sources are good, with a wide independent range with some scholarly links involved.

There are various spelling and grammatical errors throughout your draft (the player can chooses, meets a love interest in café).

I feel more information about the history of this person can be added. The article only discusses their works without any idea of the person's origins, or the story behind the founding of their company.

Your lead is good, it presents the basic information necessary to know.

My final notes would be to clean up the spelling, get some more background info, and clear up the situation with the existing article.