User:JAMS1801/Roberta Conner/Jameswateska Peer Review

Lead is good, introduces person and talks about what they're known for.

Early life/education could have more content. Especially on early life. She's from Oregon and she was given her name by her grandmother, but what's the significance of that name, why did she receive it at 13, and what was her life like at the Reservation?

Career is thorough, and if the early life/education section looks like this in your final draft, you're golden.

All relevant information and presented in a neutral tone. Links all work. Didn't see any notable grammatical errors besides:

"When Conner was thirteen,  she was given her Indian name "Sísaawipam" by her grandmother." -- add comma after thirteen.

"In her role at the Tamástslikt Cultural Institute, Conner has worked to educate the public on and preserve..." add comma after Institute.

"We Were," and "We Will Be" series of exhibits, and has mentored young scholars interested in tribal cultural preservation." could split this into two sentences:

"We Were," and "We Will Be" series of exhibits. She has also mentored young scholars interested in..."

^^ the two consecutive uses of ", and" can make it confusing to read.

Besides that, good job!

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