User:JCarter823/sandbox

Article Evaluation
Article: Fred and Rosemary West

Evaluation:
 * Fred was born September 29th, 1941.
 * He grew up from a poor farmer family.
 * He was introduced to sex at age 12.
 * Fred began to believe that incest was a normal thing due to his father molesting his sisters.
 * Fred began having sex with his younger sister Kitty and impregnated her.
 * Fred had his first child and wife in 1964.
 * He began abusing his wife and daughter.
 * Fred accidentally killed a 4-year-old boy in 1965.
 * He impregnated an 18-year-old girl, Anne McFall
 * It is believed he murdered McFall and cut out their unborn child.
 * In 1969, he met Rosemary when she was 15.
 * Rose became the caretaker of his two children, Charmaine and Anna Marie.
 * Rose's Parents forbid their relationship.
 * 1970 Rose became pregnant and gave birth to their daughter, Heather.
 * It is believed that while Fred was incarcerated, Rose murdered his daughter Charmaine.
 * Fred buried his daughter's body.
 * Charmaine's mother was then murdered as well when she wondering about the custody of their daughter.
 * Charmaine's mother's body was found severely dismembered.
 * Fred and Rose murdered their first daughter, Heather and stuffed her body under the patio.
 * Stories changed about their daughter's whereabouts
 * Fred taunted his children about their sister saying "If you don't behave you'll end up under the patio like Heather"
 * Years later, in 1994, Fred and Rose were finally arrested.
 * Fred charged with 11 murders and Rose to 10, both got life sentences
 * In 1995, Fred committed suicide in his cell.

Article Draft & Bibliography
The article that I have to chose to work on is of English serial killer, Fred West. The article itself is already pretty well made. It is very informal and goes into a lot of details. However, when I was reviewing it there were a few things that I noticed wrong with it. There were quite some grammatical errors hiding in little places. I would like to add some more information to the article if possible. An article could never have enough information so I would like to see if there is any information provided from other sources that was not provided on the Wikipedia article, and add them. I would like to develop a little more informational section on Rosemary. Even though, the article is mainly about Fred, both were key factors and I don’t think there is enough of Rosemary. I plan on adding additional information about Rosemary's life, if possible. I will find some sources that may have information that was not provided in the Wiki article and add them. So, I will mainly be editing grammatical errors and adding in pieces of information from here to there.

https://www.theguardian.com/theobserver/1999/nov/21/featuresreview.review4

http://criminalminds.wikia.com/wiki/Fred_and_Rosemary_West

http://web.archive.org/web/20150209235022/http://www.crimelibrary.com/serial_killers/weird/west/index_1.html

https://www.biography.com/people/rosemary-west-230321

http://news.bbc.co.uk/2/hi/uk_news/69928.stm

Link to Article Draft: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:JCarter823/sandbox/articledraft

Feedback from Dr. Vetter - Hey Jay! Good start on this. I think The Guardian and Biography.com sources could both be very useful. The Wikia source you can only use indirectly, however. Look for the sources they are using to build their article rather than using content from that source itself. I think this proposal could be developed slightly in terms of identifying more specific additions and developments you're going to make to the article. TO identify these, look over your sources in more detail and try to figure out the answer to this question. What information is in these sources that are not already in the article? What could I add? If you can't find some significant information to add from your sources, you might consider working with a different article. If you do decide to work with a different article and want to talk over that choice. Feel free to sign up for another one of the conference slots to meet with me again this week. Regardless, be ready to begin writing your article next Tuesday in class - and don't forget the homework assignments (a reading and two training modules). Good work on this. - Dr. Vetter