User:JD3374/The Paris Bible/Rosencrantz and Guildenstern Peer Review

First of all, I really enjoyed reading this article draft! Below are just a few suggestions and feedback, most of them are stylistic and centre around the general structure and flow of information throughout.

-The section titles could be simplified to just read “Common Characteristics” and “Structure and Format” since the title and subject of the article already imply that you’re writing about the Paris Bible

Lead:

-1st two sentences are clear and well-written, they make me want to continue reading the article

-The final paragraph of the lead section is good, but might not be needed in this section; I would keep this section shorter and end the lead at the end of the 2nd paragraph (“...than any other copy of the Bible”); I would maybe place the final paragraph as it is in the “Structure and Format” Section?

Common Characteristics Section:

-Phrase “apply the term”, which “term” is meant here? A little vague

-I like the contents list, it is clear and easy to follow (great for illustration of what is included in the Paris Bibles!)

-I would move the final paragraph (beginning with “Paris Bibles were commercially produced...”) to the “Readers and Owners” Section, it seems to fit in thematically with the section, and it would round it out nicely

Structure and Format Section:

-This section is strong, well-explained and interesting (I especially liked the explanations on vellum and the type of parchment used)

Readers and Owners:

-I’m not sure if there is more to come here, but moving the final paragraph from the ‘Common Characteristics’ section here would fill out the section in terms of information

Overall:

-Neutral tone is well constructed and consistent throughout

-Really interesting article, I really enjoyed reading it!