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=Proposed edits to Wikipedia's The Chrysanthemums article for ENG1300=
 * 1) Expanded Characterlist
 * 2) Edited Plot Summary
 * 3) Grammar
 * 4) Punctuation
 * 5) Setting
 * 6) Symbolism
 * 7) Theme
 * 8) References

Reading Lists

 * Kennedy, X. J. & Dana Cicia. (2013). "Literature: An introduction to fiction, poetry, drama, and writing".
 * Palmerino's Steinbeck's The Chrysanthemums
 * Steinbeck's THE CHRYSANTHEMUMS
 * The Chrysanthemums
 * The Real Woman Inside the Fence in "The Chrysanthemums"
 * The Texts of Steinbeck’s “The Chrysanthemums”

Original Paragraph
"Suddenly the man’s attention turns to the flowers that Elisa is tending. When he asks about them, Elisa’s annoyance vanishes, and she becomes friendly again. The man remembers seeing chrysanthemums before, and describes them: “Kind of a long-stemmed flower? Looks like a quick puff of colored smoke?” Elisa is delighted with his description. The man tells her about one of his regular customers who also gardens, and who always has work for him when he comes by. She has asked him to keep his eyes open in his travels, and to bring her some chrysanthemum seeds if he ever finds some. Now Elisa is captivated. She invites the man into the yard, prepares a pot of chrysanthemum cuttings for the woman’s garden, and gives him full instructions for tending them. Clearly, Elisa envies the man’s life on the road and is attracted to him because he understands her love of flowers. In a moment of extreme emotion she nearly reaches for him, but snatches her hand back before she touches him. Instead, she finds him two pots to mend, and he drives away with fifty cents and the cuttings, promising to take care of the plants until he can deliver them to the other woman".

Revised Paragraph
The Tinker takes notice of Elisa’s garden that is occupied by a color spectrum of blooming Chrysanthemums. The Tinker describes them as “kind of a long-stemmed flower? Looks like a quick puff of colored smoke”? Elisa goes on to say " What a nice way to describe them" and comments that they have "a good bitter smell (p.245). Elisa is delighted with his description and her frame of mind is uplifted completely. The Tinker goes on to tell her about one of his customers who is intrigued by the beauty of Chrysanthemums. She asked him to keep an eye out during his travels and if conceivable to bring her some Chrysanthemum seeds. Excitedly, Elisa invites the man into the yard and prepares him pot of chrysanthemum along with a full tutorial of proper maintenance. Elisa envies the extravagance of the Tinker’s life and resists the urge to out to touch him by finding a couple of pots for him to mend. The Tinker leaves the Allen’s home after promising to take good care of the Elisa’s Chrysanthemums on their journey to their next owner.

Original Characterlist

 * "Elisa Allen - Protaginist
 * Henry Allen - Elisa's Husband
 * Men - Meeting with Henry Allen
 * Scotty - Ranch Hand
 * Traveling Salesman - Antagonist"

Revised Characterlist

 * Elisa Allen is a childless, thirty-five year old woman who plays Protagonist role in this short story. This story takes place in the 1930's and Steinbeck uses Elisa to illustrate how women coexisted as silent victims to male supremacy and domination during this time. Elisa is married to Henry Allen (successful foothill ranch owner) (p. 242). She occupies her time by growing an vibrant and flourishing garden of Chrysanthemums.
 * Henry Allen is Elisa's Husband and plays the role of a subtle Antagonist. He is the foothill ranch owner and is incapable of empathizing and recognizing Elisa’s true abilities.
 * Scotty- Ranch hand who works for Henry Allen.
 * The Tinker is an Antagonist in this short story. His profession is as a traveling salesman offering repair services of household pots and pans. Upon arrival to the Allen's estate, Elisa is quick to refuse his services until the Tinker expresses his interest in her Chrysanthemums. Elisa states "I'm sorry,' Elisa said irritably. 'I haven't anything for you to do" (245-247). After the Tinker further expresses his interest the Chrysanthemums, Elisa is eager to educate. After mending a few pots, the tinker leaves with the Chrysanthemums only to discard them not he side of the road, for Elisa to discover later.


 * This is very well done & ready for you to upload to the original article. Thanks so much for the hard work. Pindham (talk) 20:17, 25 May 2015 (UTC)