User:JG2027/Equality Act (United States)/Abcquantumle Peer Review

Peer review - Shavar Martin

Equality Act (United States)

General info
JG2027
 * Whose work are you reviewing:


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:JG2027/Equality Act (United States)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Equality Act (United States)

Evaluate the drafted changes
=== '''Lead: The lead needs more information to reflect the article's main idea, argue what the concerns are being discussed, and explain why we should or why it is a concern. It needs to be stronger. Also, state the religious organizations that expressed their support and what religious groups and organizations oppose the Act.''' === Content: Yes, the content is relevant to the topic, but more content and sources are needed to support it. The first part of the edits is well organized, but the second part only lacks sources, so I’m not sure how to identify the gaps or the arguments that are being presented. Don't change from the article when discussing organizations, but the following sentence says the groups… when it is on the same topic because it is a historical topic, you must stick with the content.

Tone and Balance: the content is neutral, but claims lack sources. Besides, the viewpoints are underreported; it does not favor any one position or steer away from the reader, but a reader would want more information.

Sources and References:  The author does not appear to have any sources.

Organization: I think the article could be better written, but I understand the main points of the articles without the edits.

Images and Media: no images or media was added

For a new article: This is not a new article.

Overall impressions: The author has improved the quality of the article by layering or headlining various sections. However, the author can add more details relating to the article and or PE.