User:JG2027/LGBT rights in California/Abcquantumle Peer Review

General info[edit]

 * Whose work are you reviewing:

JG2027


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:JG2027/LGBT rights in California
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * LGBT rights in California

Evaluate the drafted changes[edit]
=== Lead: The lead needs more information to reflect the article's main idea, argue what the concerns are being discussed, and explain why we should or why it is a concern. It needs to be stronger. Also, state the religious organizations that expressed their support and what religious groups and organizations oppose the Act.[edit] === Content: The content does not change from the article or topics added to the article will giver readers any change from previous version. Although headlines for sections are not added to separate the flows which gives its substance.

Tone and Balance: the content is neutral, but claims lack sources. Besides, the viewpoints are underreported; it does not favor any one position or steer away from the reader, but a reader would want more information.

Sources and References:  The author does not appear to have any sources.

Organization: I think the article could be better written, but I understand the main points of the articles without the edits.

Images and Media: no images or media was added

For a new article: This is not a new article.

Overall impressions: The author has improved the quality of the article by layering or headlining various sections. However, the author can add more details relating to the article and or PE.