User:JLW546/Hestia/MagpieMeadows Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

I am reviewing JLW546 article on Hestia.


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:JLW546/Hestia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Hestia

Evaluate the drafted changes
I am a bit confused on what content was added or if some sections were just reworded to make it more neutral. However I did note that some of the pictures are new along with the section about her modern portrayals. I do agree with the author that the sections they are focusing on need more citation, so that is a good place to start to improve the article.

The pictures and the information added are relevant to the topic and I am glad that the modern portrayals was added since I found that section to be interesting. The article mostly sound neutral though I do agree with the author that the first sentence should be reworked because it does sound like it is pushing some sort of idea. Also one thing I read in the original article was a section on the Odyssey that did not make sense to the article. Perhaps that section should be removed since it is distracting.

I feel like the area that needed to be improved most is the section on citations. There are only two citation, one of which comes from a fan site about Percy Jackson. The author should cite the main book rather than the website it they wish to refer to the character. The citations are also mostly incomplete and could be added to. For the second citation you can find more information on the production through IMDB so you can cite the series properly. There are also some more scholarly sources you could add to the references of the article. For example here is this source that talks more about the sexuality of Hestia https://onesearch.library.wwu.edu/primo-explore/fulldisplay?docid=TN_cdi_proquest_journals_1787932338&context=PC&vid=WWU&lang=en_US&search_scope=All&adaptor=primo_central_multiple_fe&tab=everything&query=any,contains,hestia&offset=0. There is also this source that discusses Hestia's role in government https://onesearch.library.wwu.edu/primo-explore/fulldisplay?docid=TN_cdi_gale_infotracacademiconefile_A217220520&context=PC&vid=WWU&lang=en_US&search_scope=All&adaptor=primo_central_multiple_fe&tab=everything&query=any,contains,hestia&offset=0. There is also this source which discusses more on her cult, however there is a lot of information on her cult so its ok if you don't find anything in this source https://onesearch.library.wwu.edu/primo-explore/fulldisplay?docid=TN_cdi_crossref_primary_10_2307_4150030&context=PC&vid=WWU&lang=en_US&search_scope=All&adaptor=primo_central_multiple_fe&tab=everything&query=any,contains,hestia&offset=0. There are a lot of source so I think it is good that you are double checking them. Just make sure that each citation is providing enough information to make it complete.

I do think the images that are added are helpful and show visual textual information to back up the article. Some of the descriptions could be shorten because they are a bit long, but for the most part they work well. The first image could also use a citation maybe to explain where the object is located. If you do find more pictures I think they would be great to add because the article could always use more related images.