User:JMILES19/Wiedemann–Steiner syndrome/JasmineBriggins Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(JMILES19)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Editing User:JMILES19/Wiedemann–Steiner syndrome - Wikipedia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Wiedemann–Steiner syndrome - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
I would suggest keeping those sentences that are crossed are out because they are key elements to the introductory sentence and its relevant and concise to the topic of your article, it's short and straight to point so I believe that this does logically flow. Do you also plan to include the causes, diagnosis and treatment of this syndrome to your draft such as how the original article was composed? I've also never heard of this syndrome I believe if you added more relevant information to this topic, it could possibly flow even better by adding references it will give readers more insight on this specific syndrome in which I believe is needed to get a better understanding of the topic. The strengths of this article i believe that it is short, and it gets straight to the point although, it could use some more useful information relevant to this topic. ￼