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Feminists developed a critique of American law based on the fact that it is too gender-prioritized and patriarchal.

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Original History Section:

The term feminist jurisprudence was coined in the late 1970s by Ann Scales during the planning process for Celebration 25, a party and conference held in 1978 to celebrate the twenty-fifth anniversary of the first women graduating from Harvard Law School. The term was first published in 1978 in the first issue of the Harvard Women's Law Journal.

In 1984 Martha Fineman founded the Feminism and Legal Theory Project at the University of Wisconsin Law School to explore the relationships between feminist theory, practice, and law, which has been instrumental in the development of feminist legal theory.

Edited History Section:

The term feminist jurisprudence was coined in the late 1970s by Ann Scales during the planning process for Celebration 25, a party and conference held in 1978 to celebrate the twenty-fifth anniversary of the first women graduating from Harvard Law School. The term was first published in 1978 in the first issue of the Harvard Women's Law Journal. This feminist critique of American law was developed as a reaction to the fact that the legal system was too gender-prioritized and patriarchal.

In 1984 Martha Fineman founded the Feminism and Legal Theory Project at the University of Wisconsin Law School to explore the relationships between feminist theory, practice, and law, which has been instrumental in the development of feminist legal theory.

The foundation of the feminist legal theory was laid by women who challenged the laws that were in place to keep women in their respective places in the home. A driving force of this new movement was the need for women to start becoming financially independent.

Women who were working in law started to focus on this idea more, and started to work on achieving reproductive freedom, stopping gender discrimination in the law and workforce, and stop the allowance of sexual abuse.

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Your additions are good and appropriate in terms of its content and transition. Just one minor suggestion: I cannot see why you added quotation marks to movement.

Jessica's Edits
Fixed.

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Original Sexual Difference Model Section:

The difference model emphasizes the significance of gender discrimination and holds that this discrimination should not be obscured by the law, but should be taken into account by it. Only by taking into account differences can the law provide adequate remedies for women’s situation, which is in fact distinct from men’s. The difference model is in direct opposition to the sameness account which holds that women’s sameness with men should be emphasized. To the sameness feminist, employing women’s differences in an attempt to garner greater rights is ineffectual to that end and places emphasis on the very characteristics of women that have historically precluded them from achieving equality with men.

Edited Sexual Difference Model Section:

The difference model emphasizes the significance of gender discrimination and holds that this discrimination should not be obscured by the law, but should be taken into account by it. Only by taking into account differences can the law provide adequate remedies for women’s situation, which is in fact distinct from men’s. The difference model is in direct opposition to the sameness account which holds that women’s sameness with men should be emphasized. To the sameness feminist, employing women’s differences in an attempt to garner greater rights is ineffectual to that end and places emphasis on the very characteristics of women that have historically precluded them from achieving equality with men.

The sameness feminist also argued that there was already special treatment for these so-called "differences" in the law, which is what was oppressing women. The idea of there being differences between the sexes lead to the classical thought that feminist legal theory was trying to get rid of. It forced women to prove that they were like men by comparing their experiences to those of men, all in an attempt to gain legal protection. This all only led to women trying to meet norms that were made by men without questioning why these were accepted as the norm for equality.

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Add a section on Hedonic Jurisprudence:

Feminist legal theory produced a new idea of using hedonic jurisprudence in order to achieve the equality they were looking for. Hedonic jurisprudence was developed to show that women's experiences of assault and rape were a product of there being laws that treated them as less human and gave them less rights than men. This made it so given examples were not just describing possible scenarios, they were actually showing that these events happen. Feminist legal theorists then came to rely on actually showing experienced based stories to show how the law ignores the interests and disrespects the existence of women.

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I am confused about this sentence "Hedonic jurisprudence was developed to show that experiences of assault and rape of women that were a product of there being laws that treated them as less human and gave them less rights than men." Could you rephrase it?

In this sentence, "This made it so they weren’t just describing possible scenarios, they were actually showing that they happen." You used many pronouns that I found hard to refer back to a certain noun. Could you replace some "they" with nouns for readers to follow you easily?

Jessica's Edits
Fixed.

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Original Overview Section:

Feminist legal theory, also known as feminist jurisprudence, is based on the belief that the law has been fundamental in women's historical subordination. The project of feminist legal theory is twofold. First, feminist jurisprudence seeks to explain ways in which the law played a role in women's former subordinate status. Second, feminist legal theory is dedicated to changing women's status through a rework of the law and its approach to gender.

Edited Overview Section:

Feminist legal theory, also known as feminist jurisprudence, is based on the belief that the law has been fundamental in women's historical subordination. The project of feminist legal theory is twofold. First, feminist jurisprudence seeks to explain ways in which the law played a role in women's former subordinate status. Second, feminist legal theory is dedicated to changing women's status through a rework of the law and its approach to gender. It is a critique of American law that was created to change the way women were treated and how judges had applied the law in order to keep women in the same position they had been in for years. The women who worked in this area viewed law as holding women in a lower place in society than men based on gender assumptions, and judges have therefore relied on these assumptions to make their decisions. This movement was based in the 1960s and 1970s. It was crucial to allowing women to become their own people through becoming financially independent and having the ability to find real jobs that were not available to them before due to discrimination in employment.

Wenqi's Feedback
For this sentence "It is a critique of American law that was created to change the way women were treated and how judges applied the law in order to keep women in the same position they had been in for years prior." Did you mean that "It is a critique that American law was created to change the way women were treated and how judges applied the law in order to keep women in the same position they had been in for prior years."?

Jessica's Edits
No, feminist legal theory is a critique of already written American law, it was not created by American law. The sentence reads better without the word prior in it at all, so it has been removed.

Reuben Fortushniak (feedback)
The drafts seem very unbiased and straight forward. Maybe put links to other Wikipedia articles for terms like "norms" so people have some reference but other than that it is a pretty solid edit. You did a good job writing from an objective point of view.

Kceira Hairston (feedback)
You did a very good job at going into detail and being clear.