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Article Selection
Please list articles that you're considering for your Wikipedia assignment below. Begin to critique these articles and find relevant sources.

Option 1

 * Article title
 * WikiProject Indigenous peoples of North America/Anishinaabe


 * Article Evaluation
 * The article needs some help for sure. Specifically regarding my tribe, the Red Cliff Band of Chippewa, there are 3 separate pages that have links from the article. There is not a condensed or simple way to learn about the tribe, rather the need to go to many different pages for a holistic view. None of the leads for each of the 3 Red Cliff pages are very well done, and some are largely redundant. This is likely a product of spreading information out. Regarding individual tribes, the article is missing both the Grand Portage Band of Chippewa and the Leech Lake Band of Ojibwe. This will need to be added.


 * Sources
 * Overall, the sources are very good and robust despite the above criticisms. I find that for both the Grand Portage Band and the Leech Lake Band, there is a plethora of source material for the reservations themselves but nothing great about the bands themselves.
 * https://www.redcliff-nsn.gov
 * https://dpi.wi.gov/amind/tribalnationswi/redcliff
 * https://www.glitc.org/tribes-served/red-cliff-band-of-lake-superior-chippewa-indians/
 * https://www.bayfieldcounty.org/1091/Red-Cliff

Option 2

 * Article title
 * Fort McKay First Nation


 * Article Evaluation
 * The opening lead sentence is pretty confusing and doesn't encompass very much information about what the article really is about. The entire lead is hard to follow and poorly done. The article is NOT up to date, and caps the information at 2009 despite recent relevant things. Each section is actually worse than the one prior. Full of run on sentences and information is presented in an incredibly confusing way. The article flow also presents a decently confusing issue, but specifically in the "Environment" subsection. It is long and poorly organized. The reorganization and condensation of each subsequent subsection of the "Environment" section is much needed for the article to successfully convey the information.


 * Sources
 * One of the only redeeming parts of this article is the amount of sources that have been compiled. Many linked pages no longer exist though.

Option 3

 * Article title
 * Tohono O'odham


 * Article Evaluation
 * The lead section is quite good. A holistic overview and easy to follow. There is a "Health" section of the article that makes very little sense. There are claims of diabetes vaccines in the section? Pretty confusing and the information is not up to date. Information about the diabetes issue is a bit over emphasized for such a large article. I would also note that the "Tohono O'odham Community Action (TOCA)" section feels a bit oddly placed. I would put it after the "History of Border Issues" section in order to contextualize some of the issues presented. The main issues of the article come from the POV of the contributors and the lack of true source material. Oftentimes things are listed as fact, with no relevant backing. Such as reference 1 in which David Kelly's LA Times article "Illegal Traffic Disrupts Reservation in Arizona." was cited despite having no mention of the fact it was supporting. The point of view feels attacking and there are many mentions of it in the Talk page, many of which are still unfixed. Personally, I would like more relevant media as well. The article is a lot of text and not much else.


 * Sources
 * Many, many sources are very good and supportive to the facts, although there are a few that are pushing it. Many linked pages do not exist. Many citations are no longer working or improperly cited.
 * https://fortmckay.com
 * https://www.fortmcmurraytoday.com/news/local-news/fort-mckay-first-nation-hoping-to-develop-oilsands-lease
 * https://www.newswire.ca/news-releases/fort-mckay-first-nation-chief-and-council-an-historic-victory-for-treaty-rights-and-indigenous-communities--850315935.html

Option 4

 * Article title
 * Navajo Nation


 * Article Evaluation
 * Given that this article is a class-5 vital article yet has received the designation of "C", the article clearly needs help. The lead is actually quite good and concise. It could be improved by providing brief introductions to the vast array of subsections that are present in this article. The content of the article is MASSIVE. Per the talk section, there is a need to heavily consolidate each section and actually create new pages for some of the information. The subsections could be easily organized provided there was a link to another article that could clarify, rather than confuse like this article often does. I had trouble following sometimes. Following that, there is information that is not up to date. A contributor on the lead page, who works with the tribe, included a plethora of information that needed to be included in the article, yet it has not been added yet. Some images have been nominated for "speedy removal" due to certain copyright infringements, but I found the overall frequency of photos to be good. One thing I would note about the media is the lack of comprehensive maps of the Navajo Nation. There are only 2 relatively small ones that lack a lot of substantial information.


 * Sources
 * There are so many sources it is hard to keep track of them all. The page is very long and messy, but the citations are generally good and include active links and all relevant information about books cited. One concern is the few citations that only list an author's name and year, but nothing more. Those citations will need to be corrected.
 * https://www.navajo-nsn.gov
 * https://www.discovernavajo.com
 * https://www.ihs.gov/navajo/navajonation/

Option 5

 * Article title
 * Aboriginal History of Western Australia


 * Article Evaluation
 * Where to start. The lead is almost non existent. It provides almost no information and reads almost like a disclaimer. When moving into the first section of history, the introductory sentence says there are 5 distinct periods of Western Australia Aboriginal History, but the article only lists three... Even in this history section, it references many acts and pages that should exist to explain these acts, but none do. The content is very unexplained. There is a tiny section at the bottom called "Groupings". Once again, it claims there are 5 groupings of western Australian aboriginals. It doesn't list a single group after that. There are unverified claims of a lack of information. There are legitimately no photos or media at all. Given that this is such a large and important group, it baffles me that there is so little. On the talk page, one contributor suggests deleting the page all together and perhaps starting from scratch. The page also received a "C" designation, but I find that incredibly generous. The tone is also presented with a non neutral point of view. The article is also very poorly organized and flows in a very bad way. Why would they arrange the "Grouping" section at the very bottom? It doesn't matter at the moment as it is still almost completely useless due to lack of information. This whole article/page is really poorly done. It would be a great candidate for overhaul.


 * Sources
 * Sources seem okay. There are many books listed, and not many things with links in of themselves. As information becomes more relevant, sources get better. In all fairness, the Western Australian Aboriginals lived in a purely oral culture before the early-mid 19th century.
 * https://www.dlgsc.wa.gov.au/aboriginal-history
 * https://aiatsis.gov.au
 * http://museum.wa.gov.au/referendum-1967/aboriginal-rights