User:JS1833/Catholic Church in Argentina/Unknownusername2000 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

JS1833


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:JS1833/Catholic_Church_in_Argentina/Unknownusername2000_Peer_Review?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_peer_review


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

- Everything looks pretty good regarding information and content. The paragraphs for each section are a too many sentences to be one paragraph. I recommend splitting each section into two sections. The first one could be left as one, but the second one I believe should be spilt into two. The last few sentences in the first paragraph for regards to the different kinds of catholics are a little too specific and may not need all of the explaining. If it is cut down into fewer sentences it could be a alternative to just having one paragraph instead of splitting into two.

In the second section, it is a little heavy on information on the montoneros movement, it is a good piece of information to have in the section, but I believe it does not need as much explaining.

I believe when you mention the "national catholics", it could be used for redirect source. Also when adding a citation I would make make sure that the period is inside the citation number (i.e. evaluate the draft. ) Moving forward, the article has a lot good information but the inserts of sources when making claims I believe could be placed in a better places in the sections when as well. The last sentence makes a claim with historical information but is not cited. All the sources are accessible (some need an account to fully read, but are still accessible).

Overall the article, looks really great!