User:JSL22/Great Railroad Strike of 1877/Ijrokusek22 Peer Review

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JSL22, Strensch22


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 * Great Railroad Strike of 1877

Evaluate the drafted changes
Underneath Article body, consider changing the sentence "The forces he sent were still unable to send off the 600 or some trains stuck at the B&O station due to the crowds and also the fact that many of the militiamen the Gov. sent were also railroad workers and in support of the strike." to "However the forces he sent were still unable to send off the roughly 600 trains stuck at the B&O station due to the crowds. Also, many of the militiamen the Gov. sent were also railroad workers and in support of the strike."

In the third sentence underneath article body, change the word force, into forced, to fix a typo.

The sentence can be left as is but I feel that it could be made to flow a little nicer.

The addition to the strike ends portion of the article is a nice touch, it expands on the content while still maintaining a neutral tone. The "general effects" paragraph added is also a nice expansion of the article as it doesn't exactly talk all that much about things that happened afterwards, it only discusses what happened in the lead up and during the strike. One suggestion I have is when you are adding to or creating a new paragraph, add in the citations after you have finished adding in information. This will let readers click on the link to go directly to the source so that they know that it is credible and can reference the sources if they need to use them for whatever reason.