User:JSlater2119/Cartesian Self/Eekirk Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

JSlater2119


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Cartesian self


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Cartesian self

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead is very clear and explains the topic briefly but with enough detail to understand what it is about. I'd suggest taking the sentence about the Cartesian Other and making it into its own section with "extension" and mention it with a little less detail in the lead. Your content does to seem to have any bias or attempt to persuade anyone into believing one thing or another. You also have good organization so far, starting with the background is probably the best idea. Your article is really good so far, just add a few more sections, maybe more detail on what the Cartesian self meant for him and where he went from there.