User:JWesleyPowell/Landless Workers' Movement/Bluehunter19 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

JWesleyPowell


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:JWesleyPowell/Landless_Workers%27_Movement?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall, this is a great article that healthily improves the quality of the previous writing. Some minor issues have to do with phrasing; "as mentioned above" and "not only this" are two examples of unnecessary additions.

It is also unclear how Liberation Theology is relevant to the new paragraphs. If its referenced later in the body, then ignore this feedback, but it should be more apparent if that was a clear goal for the new additions.

Two final points: we use the letter "z" in words like "organization" here in America, and that lead is so god-awful that something must be done to fix it.