User:Jack1231344/Amelia Earhart/Sschriber Peer Review

LEAD: I think the introduction is very good and does a good job of summarizing what will be talked about in the rest of the wiki. I think this section "During her life, she embraced celebrity culture and women's rights, and since her disappearance has become a cultural icon" might edge on the side of persuasive which is hard to say honestly tho. maybe add that she is considered a cultural icon to not show opinion (even tho she def is an icon). Also I am not sure if there is a section about her embracing celeb culture, if there is a most consistent way to say she was involved in women rights activism, using her fame to promote etc... maybe thats more consistent.

CONTENT: When it says born and raised... in the intro, I think that should go in the "early life section," because it's more logical but the rest seems fitting in terms of organization. Also I feel like explaining what happened to her on that flight should be talked about in depth later on, but I understand why its in the intro bc of its significance, I just think it doesn't need to be as explanatory in the intro, but more so in the body paragraphs.

TONE: only some parts feel persuasive, but that just means slight changes in word choice because that fine line between persuasive and factual especially for her is really hard to distinguish.

IMAGES: images are great, probably no additions needed.

I think what you added to this was good and helpful in expounding upon her as an important societal figure for many reasons. main work could be done in getting rid of opinionative adjectives and order of the intro and main body.

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