User:JackHUC/User:JackHUC/sandbox/Darius Crew Peer Review

The article does well explaining what operation London Bridge is and restating what certain people have said in the articles. I was impressed given the amount of detail about the queens dead and the exact date of when she died. I suggest that the author adds quotation at the end of the sentence that is before citation #3 under the paragraph that titles Police required to protect world leaders at the queen's funeral.

I suggest that the author also explain why the world leaders needed to be protected and why there had to be 13 arrests during the operation and add a few more citations. These changes would be an improvement because that would fix the grammar and it would help readers get a better understanding on why people had to get arrested during the operation. The most important thing the author could do to improve the article is giving a little more detail just to help readers get a better understanding of what they are reading. I noticed that the author restated what certain important people have felt or said about the operations and I feel like this could help improve my article.

Looking over the article I feel somewhat satisfied knowing the importance of each topic in the article. rereading over the article I feel that it gives a decent amount of detailing, but I also feel like there could be more detail on the important information to add to certain topics. I think the lead does give more weight to certain parts of the article over others and that one of the missing pieces of information could be giving more detail about the issue. The sections I can say are well organized, but I suggest checking the citations and make sure they have the correct coding I had to do the same so just a heads up. The sections length was important to the articles subject but what I did find a little unnecessary was the controversy section and how there's nothing under it. He did pretty good with his research I feel like he collected everything that he needed.

The article does draw a conclusion but does not try to convince the reader to accept one particular point of view. The perspective of the authors point of view is third person. There aren't any words or phrases that don't feel neutral. Any words from the people that the author restated he named those people. I felt like the article was a pretty clear reflection of various aspects of a topic. Yes, each topic is connected to a source. Each statement with a source only has one. Each source is pretty accurate according to the reading. Based on this review I plan to make these Three revisions to my own article are checking my sources, seeking more information, and making sure my sources match with my topics.