User:JackJiangZZ/Xi River/Daixue1998 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

JackJiangZZ


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:JackJiangZZ/Xi River


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Xi River

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead

Good job for the lead. The lead part briefly introduces readers the basic situation and location of Xi River, which gives readers a huge senses of Xi River. In the articles, you list 'Environmental Impacts' and 'Current Issue', but in your lead part, you do not mention this two contents. I think you'd better add some brief information about these two contents, which can lead readers to read your article and help readers know the flow and the structure of your article.

Content

The content added is relevant to the topic. Compared to the current version of the article Xi River in Wikipedia and according to their reference, the content added is up-to-date. For missing parts, firstly I think you can add a part about 'Geography'. Although you mention the location, flow direction, and basic information of Xi River in lead part, I do think you can add more details about its geography, such as tributaries, the surrounding geomorphology, mainstem, river system and other relevant information. Moreover, you can add a map to illustrate. If readers only read the words, it is hard for readers to image or know where Xi River is and what it looks like. Secondly, you can add some information about the 'history' of Xi River. China is a country with a long history and has gone through many dynasties. Maybe in different dynasty, the name and range of Xi River are different. After so long, there must be some changes in Xi River, which is worth introducing. Thus, I think understanding the history of Xi River is particularly important for understanding Xi River itself. Thirdly, if you can find some information about ecosystem of Xi River, including major organisms, plants, temperature and others, then you can add. I know it is hard to find these information in China, but if you can, please try. Fourthly, you mentioned 'great contributions to agricultural irrigation, river transportation, and power generation in coastal areas', but you do not have sections about them in the article.

Environmental Impacts

It is good to have this section. From your description, readers can know the overall information about organic and inorganic carbon in Xi River. It is very general. And is there only one environmental impact? If there are more, you can describe them as well. Are these environmental impacts positive or negative for Xi River and its surrounding areas?

Current Issue

This part is really important. There is some useful information about Xi River's droughts. I have a question about its precipitation. It said ' with 80% of precipitation falling between April and September'. What means 80% of precipitation? I am a little confused about it. Did 80% of precipitation mean it is raining or not raining finally? I think if we want to express that Xi River has droughts due to extreme weather, it is better to have the precise data. For my understanding, 80% of precipitation may have a huge rainfall, did it cause flood in that period? Thus, I think you'd better do more research, because it would make readers confused. Are there any other issues for Xi River? Due to the current issue, are there any solutions.

Tone and Balance

I think the content added is neutral, which does not lead readers to have any bias on the contents. The tone of the article is professional. And I think you can explain some jargons, such as 80% of precipitation, organic detritus and et al.

Sources and References

There are three references. I think all of them are reliable, and the content accurately reflects what the cited sources say. All of three sources are thorough. One source is not current, and others are current. All of the links work. I think you need to have more sources, there are only three sources. Each section of the article only has one to two sources. I believe in the final version of this article you have more references and contents.

Organization

The content added is well-written and well-organized, and it is easy to read. There are some small grammatical errors. It has different sections which can clearly lead readers. I suggest you can have a table about Xi River's system like the current version of the article.

Image and Media

There are no image and media in this article. In the future work, I suggest there is one map of Xi River at least.

Overall Impressions

Good job! Compared to the current version of the article, you add other information about Xi River, including Environmental Impact and Current Issue. I can really learn something about environmental impacts and issue from your article. Every section you explain is easily to understand. I think you can have more sections in this article. It is better to learn Xi River from different perspectives not only in Environmental impacts and current issue.