User:Jack Oppen/On Colors/Elsaskinner Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jack Oppen


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jack%20Oppen/On_Colors?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * On Colors

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Since there isn't much on the page there is a lot of room to create a really good lead and body. I would keep that in mind as you're structuring the article. The notes taken on the sandbox are really detailed and in your own words so they will be great to incorporate into the article. I didn't see any references other then the work itself. I would recommend adding the link to the work so it can easily be accessed and adding other sources if possible. Adding outside sources about the author or debate of who is the author would be one way to expand the article. The article also mentions Isaac Newton and how his experiments changed how we thought of color theories including On Colors. This would also be a great place to expand on how the theories are different and expand on the influence of On Colors as a theory. Looking to see how this work was influential. A picture of some sort may also be beneficial to maybe depict some of the points written down. I would try to expand the article to focus on not just the work itself but it's impact.