User:Jackie.gran42/Colonialism and genocide/XCallanbur Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jackie.gran42


 * Link to draft you're reviewing

User:Jackie.gran42/Colonialism and genocide


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Colonialism and genocide

Evaluate the drafted changes
- The lead is good and adds plenty of good insight into the topic of the article

- In-text citations would be useful after sentences/groups of sentences such as "The term genocide, although practiced long before, was coined in the 20th century following the Holocaust. Ralph Lemkin, a Polish lawyer, first used the term genocide." The citation appears later in the paragraph making these claims seem unwarranted

- Ralph Lemkin's actual name is Raphael Lemkin

- The sentence, "...deeming those of an educated white European background as high-class and less educated non-European people as lower class." needs commas separating the descriptors: "...deeming those of an educated, white, European background as high-class and less-educated, non-European people as lower class."

- Added examples in "Researched examples of genocide linked to colonialism" section are insightful

- Consider listing the researched examples in chronological order to organize them in a less-random format

- Wikilinks to existing articles where names, titles, or similar buzzwords found in the examples list would be useful for wikipedia readers, examples include: Taino (Taino Tribe), Christopher Columbus, Tibet, etc.

- References and citations look good and credible

- Do not forget to remove headers "Lead" and "Article Body" before copying over to main article

- Consider adding more wikilinks to the "See Also" section such as a link to the page about the holocaust

Overall, your article is looking great. Your lead is much butter than the original and your examples are great additions to the page information. Minor grammar errors are present and some issues regarding facts and their citations need addressing, but nothing egregious. I think some reformatting on the "Researched examples" section and additional wikilinks would go a long way to help the readability of the article and help readers explore into related topics easier.

If any of these criticisms need further explanation, feel free to reach out or maybe add a question mark after my bullet points so I know to elaborate, I will check your article in a few days in case of further editing. Great article, I hope this helps!