User:Jackiemcdonnell/Yoga as exercise/0JOTARO Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jackiemcdonnell


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jackiemcdonnell/Yoga_as_exercise?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * " Exercise is often viewed as an intense, dreadful type of movement. Working out is seen as an unenjoyable chore to most people. However, by practicing yoga, people can learn to exercise and move intuitively. Yoga, compared to other exercises, promotes a healthy relationship with exercise and the body. " - Personal opinion | Use of phrase 'most people' thus using an unspecified group of people | No citations or references to back up the text
 * "Latino explains that the results of this study show that the 8-week yoga exercise intervention program significantly helped teachers attain a greater awareness of their emotions and body sensations and improved professional burnout symptoms” (Latino) ." - Grammatical error(did not use the starting quotation mark)
 * " The effect on teachers was an improvement of emotional and bodily awareness. Symptoms of burnout were also greatly reduced. Improving mental health is critical in society today, as stress and anxiety are often ignored. The results of yoga can appear to have an immense impact on one’s mental health " - No citation
 * " Shown by this study, yoga has been proven to improve a schizophrenic patient's quality of life. " - Potential to remove this line
 * Can reduce the quotations from the articles itself