User:Jackiemcdonnell/Yoga as exercise/Kaner04 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Jackiemcdonnell


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jackiemcdonnell/Yoga_as_exercise?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Yoga as exercise

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think in you're lead, it looks like it may be trying to persuade someone to do yoga by saying "how much of a choir working out is" and then saying yoga is better and why. I think you should revise it and say as an alternative option too working out, you can do yoga and then give the benefits of yoga. I believe this will make the article less like a persuasive piece and more like an informational article. I also would say you need more citation, because in the body part of you're article has three sentences without a citation. Overall though the article looks informative, and the body section has good details, would just change the lead and add some more citation.