User:Jackiemcdonnell/Yoga as exercise/Khernandezumanzor Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

- jackiemcdonnell


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * - User:Jackiemcdonnell/Yoga as exercise
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

I Evaluate the drafted changes
Jackie’s sandbox draft for “Yoga as exercise” was well written with reliable sources included and placed where it needed too be. Her information was clear and precise conveying the article topic justly. The lead sentence was written almost like it was made too be a thesis statement for a persuasive essay though. It should start by giving a small description of what yoga is and lead it into her statement about the benefits of using yoga as an exercise. She used 2/3 of the sources in her bibliography though, which is fine but it can be removed from her bibliography if not used. If it was used she should cite it in her paragraph.