User:Jackmccullar/sandbox

The title of the wikipedia article that I am editing is called Biology and Sexual Orientation, and it is about explaining causes of sexual orientation.

1) Lead:

In the lead section of the article, I believe that the importance of the topic is portrayed, however I believe that there can be more info added to the lead section in order to reflect more important information. I think that overall, the lead section can include more information.

2) Organization:

Although there are clear sections throughout the article, I think that the layout of the sections could be a little better. For example, I think that the section about the actual scientific studies that pertained to this topic should be at the end of the article, rather than be the first thing after the lead section. Also, it might be better to put the sexual orientation and evolution section at the beginning because it lays the foundation for the reasoning behind the studies.

3) Balance:

I think that respectively, each section's length is appropriate. However, although the politial aspects section may be interesting, I don't think that that section is vital to the article as a whole. From my overview of the article, I think that the important viewpoints are included. Also, I see no evidence of persuasion.

4) Neutral:

I could not guess the perspective of the author while reading the article. Throughout the article, the author is not using persuasive language and is just portraying proven facts. I think that there is a clear reflection of various aspects of the topic.

5) Sources:

A majority of the sources referenced are reliable and quite reputable. There are over 100 articles sourced that give insight from many different perspectives. From the few times I read over the whole article, I did not notice any uncited statements.

6) Overall...:

I think that the article has really good information, however it can be portrayed in a better way that is easier to read. I plan on changing the layout of the article as well as try to change some of the wording to make it easier to read and comprehend. I think that the most important thing that I can add to this article is just making it easier to read and understand.

Potential Edits:

1) Move the "Scientific research and studies" to the very end and move the "Sexual orientation and evolution" section to the beginning. I would move these sections because I think that it would make the article easier to read.

2) Possibly remove the "Political aspects" section because Im not sure the relevance and it might just be extra text that is not needed

3) Go throughout and make better transitions between sections/paragraphs so that it can be as easy of a read as possible while still learning some interesting information.