User:JacksonJLandry/African olive pigeon/Kgaly2 Peer Review

Article you are reviewing: African Olive Pigeon


 * 1) First, what does the article do well? Is there anything from your review that impressed you? Any turn of phrase that described the subject in a clear way?

The article does well with explaining what geophagy is.


 * 1) What changes would you suggest the author apply to the article? Why would those changes be an improvement?

I wouldn’t make any changes! It is very concise and explains everything well!


 * 1) What's the most important thing the author could do to improve the article?

I think it is good currently but maybe an improvement could be transitions between sentences!


 * 1) Did you notice anything about the article you reviewed that could be applicable to your own article? If so, what?

Yes! My topic is also geophagy, so this was helpful to see another type of bird that intakes clay or dirt and looking at what benefits it provides.


 * 1) Are the sections organized well, in a sensible order? Would they make more sense presented some other way (chronologically, for example)? Specifically, does the information they are adding to the article make sense where they are putting it?

I think adding to the feeding section fits perfectly because the article mentions geophagy already!


 * 1) Is each section's length equal to its importance to the article's subject? Are there sections in the article that seem unnecessary? Is anything off-topic?

No!


 * 1) Does the article draw conclusions or try to convince the reader to accept one particular point of view?

The viewpoint is neutral.


 * 1) Are there any words or phrases that don't feel neutral? For example, "the best idea," "most people," or negative associations, such as "While it's obvious that x, some insist that y."

There are no words or phrases that seem bias.


 * 1) Are most statements in the article connected to a reliable source, such as textbooks and journal articles? Or do they rely on blogs or self-published authors?

Yes, the sources look reliable.


 * 1) Are there a lot of statements attributed to one or two sources? If so, it may lead to an unbalanced article, or one that leans too heavily into a single point of view.

I don’t know what information is from which source.


 * 1) Are there any unsourced statements in the article, or statements that you can't find stated in the references? Just because there is a source listed, doesn't mean it's presented accurately!

Yes, there is no sources in the paragraph.

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