User:Jacksonfarr1/Effects of legalized cannabis/Doas52 Peer Review

General info
Jacksonfarr1
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Jacksonfarr1/Effects of legalized cannabis:
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Effects of legalized cannabis

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: I like that you state which topics you plan on working on. I would suggest moving your sandbox content to the draft section below once you are further into the assignment. An introductory sentence that explains exactly what your article is discussing would be helpful for the lead, the original article has a good example of a lead that I would recommend looking at.

Content:

The statistics you present make for good content. You have a lot of information to work with so far, but I feel that you can expand upon these topics in more detail. After looking at the statistics presented in the original article, I think that your statistics will be a good addition.

Tone and Balance: You have a neutral tone throughout the article which is what we are looking for. One sentence in the article could be changed though, "Not only will America see an increase in tax dollars, but also a reduction in resources spent on arresting people for marijuana related crimes." This quote sounds like it is predicting the future which is not very neutral. You should focus on describing effects that have already occurred from marijuana legalization, not potential effects that may happen in the future.

Sources and References:

So far I can't see any sources on your sandbox draft. I would work on adding the sources when you can.

Organization:

The organization is kind of all over the place at the moment which is ok since this is an early draft, but in the future I would move your content into the sections below titled lead, content, references, etc.

Images and Media:

No images or media yet.

Overall Impressions:

Does your peer have 5-7 reliable sources?

No

Is at least one of them a source from class reading or the "suggested sources" list?

No

Does the topic link in some way to our course material?

No

Does your peer add historical context to their article?

No

Based on what you know from course content, what do you think Wikipedia users should know about this topic? In other words, what would you recommend adding and/or considering further?

I would recommend adding some more historical context or links to consumerism in order to connect the topic with our class material. Overall I like the statistics and information you have in your sandbox so far. I feel that with some more content, references, and organization, your article will be very well done.