User:Jacob Aloe/Binge eating/MeaganP11 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

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 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Binge eating
 * Binge eating

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

- The lead includes an introductory sentence that describes the articles topic, which is binge eating

- The lead does not include a brief description of the articles major sections. Overall, the introduction is missing lots of information. It does not entice the reader to continue reading the article.

- The lead is under detailed. There are just statement of facts without tying together a thesis.

Content:

- Although there is little content provided, it is relevant to the topic. There are a few different sub sections such as : diagnosis, warning signs, causes, health risks, effects, treatments ect...

- There is also a section about the history of binge eating which is helpful in gaining a deeper understanding of the disorder.

- There is much content that could be added. For example, under causes, they could expand by listing specific causes such as social and cultural factors, psychological risk factors and biological risk factors.

- There could be a section added about how to develop a healthier relationship with food. This could consist of things such as avoiding temptation, listening to your body, not avoiding fat and focusing on what you’re eating.

Tone and balance:

- The content is neutral

- It is unbiased

- Most of the viewpoints are underrepresented. The sub sections only scratch the surface. Very few examples are provided that could deepen understanding.

Sources and references:

- After reading through the references, I can contest that the information provided in article is accurate, and up to date. It is also all very well cited.

Organization:

- Although there are few grammar mistakes, sentence structure could be improved.

- There are clear sections that are organized by subtitles which makes the text easy to follow.

Images and media:

- There are no images, colours or graphs, that are presented.

Overall, this article needs some work. The information presented is clear and informative however, there is much information missing in order for this article to be considered complete.